Joanne Adylse Lynne

This is very creative, amazing.

Grazie, grazie both of you~! This one actually has a tune to it, which makes it a lullaby. =)

Thank you for writing the things I'd say to my ex-boyfriend (that is, if I ever talked to him again). This is funny, sarcastic, brilliant.

You described the images of nature, while inserting emotions and thoughts between the lines. Overall it's pretty good.

Beautifully eloquent. Enlighten me, what does "eighteen" have to do with this piece?

@Snoweary and xhellysmx, merci! I'll keep improving! This poem was after all, written to expel the negativity from myself. @Artsy, thank you! This has nothing to do with Deepavali, except ...

Merci! I hope I will write better in future.

It is a very beautiful poem. I suppose, it would be more or less, what good children would want their mothers to hear at their deathbeds or in their afterlives.

Beautiful. It reminds me of a past relationship, so filled with lies to conceal what was never meant to be concealled. If this is written for someone- like the girl ...

Merci, everyone! I'll keep improving my writing. I believe I can still do better. Keep writing as well, people!

Personally, I think it would be better if this is part of a short story, something resembling a letter to a lost love. It doesn't really rhyme as a poem, ...

While I like the first stanza, the second one seems rather awkward to me. No offense meant.

Merci, everyone! I'll keep improving my writing. =)

Personally, I find that the question marks which keep reappearing in this poem have kind of disrupted the flow. But hey, someone could do a rap with this!

Thank you, everyone, for pointing the messiness out. Actually, I was reading it over and over. Something just didn't feel right. =P Anyway, I've started a new site, and I'll ...